Chapter 16 of Eclipse

[mijan]

"Eclipse" has been updated.  Chapter sixteen, entitled "And Straight On 'Till Morning", has been posted.  It's the longest chapter yet, and I dare say the most intense.  Enjoy it, and perhaps leave me a review over on Schnoogle. 

-P

Comments

[essawkward.livejournal.com]

*hugs* I really hope you get to go dear, because being deployed wouldn't be half as bad if you made it to TWH, right? If you do have to leave soon, you know we'll all miss you incrediblemuch. So much love dear, and I hope things aren't horrible.

[mijan.livejournal.com]

I think things will be okay. I'm not worried, and somehow, I think I'll manage to get to TWH. Positive thinking.

[essawkward.livejournal.com]

That's the first step! I'm glad you're doing okay. ♥

[mijan.livejournal.com]

I am. *loves*

[silentlytold.livejournal.com]

hello dear, just dropped by to tell you that your lastest chapter was absolutely fabulous. I enjoyed every bit of it. To say the end almost killed me is an understatement, but well... if it's really part of the fic I'm willing to forgive you :P
Of course I voted for you in the new-classics elections ;)
Good luck with the army stuff. I've always wanted to join the army, but I'm not brave enough.

[eleal.livejournal.com]

Thanks for keeping us posted. I wanted to let you know too that I also voted for you in the new-classics elections. I was a little bummed that we had to pick 5 though, because there were only 2 or 3 that I really, really loved and I'd have liked to give them more weight. (Yes, Eclipse was one of them.) Do you get a lot of new readers from polls like this?

I'm keeping my fingers crossed for you still over TWH!

[lost2mercy.livejournal.com]

Oops, I just tried leaving feedback over at schnoogle, but I think I accidentially left it for the prologue instead for Chapter 16. So, just to make sure this is not lost somewhere in the internets, I'll just put it in this comment too...

Wow, I can see why you were so looking forward to posting this chapter.

God, you made me CRY. When Harry started to make Draco memorize last messages to his friends and Dumbledore, I gave in. Too much. (Um, in a good way...)

I loved the dancing scene and the way you took your time to describe what was happening to the boys emotionally and physically up until the eclipse. Draco's epiphany and subsequent decision was beautiful; it all made perfect sense to him and the reader at the same moment.

The cliffhanger is Ev0l, of course! But I just hope that you'll have time to write the next chapter fast (meaning I hope that you don't really have to go overseas after all...)

Thanks for writing and giving us this great story!

[(Anonymous)]

Wow, that's good news, then, isn't it? At least for now. - Michelle...this may be a stupid question, since I don't know what exactly Army Reservist means, but isn't there a chance for you to just quit, so that you're safe? Even if you'd have to observe a term of notice, maybe there would be time enough so that you would have left the army before that unit will be deployed. I heard many US soldiers don't support that cause anyway. Surely you could find a good civil job as a biologist. AND you would definitely be able to attend the round H/D table... ;)
About the new chapter, I couldn't read it yet, have to wait till Monday, because I have to print it out, but, given your other readers' comments, it must be splendid, although I have some forebodings, reading about a sad ending! 'meep' What are your readers so depressed about... Maybe I won't print it out at all and just imagine everything went alright for the boys. :)

Take care, wintryshowers

[mimoletnoe.livejournal.com]

Oj, I've been keeping my fingers crossed for you to have the possibility to go to WH whatever happens. I so hope you can make it! Anyway... stupid war.

YAY! for chapter 16!! Am sorry I didn't reply at once when you asked me if I was a part of the Yahoo! group and if I read your explanation as to why it was natural for Harry to confess the way he did... Well, I am part of the group (I am a profound lurker when it comes to Y!Groups), but I don't really think your fic needs extra explanations. It's all there in the text, and you are a marvelous writer who simply doesn't need to provide guidelines for her readers, IMO ;-)

My comment that Harry's confession was "too cute to be true" meant only that I liked the whole sequence to bits and pieces and then some. Seeing that English is not my first language, I probably still have to learn how to use my vocabulary and express myself more clearly ;-)

I am really sorry if I made you think something was unclear from the fic! It is perfect and I am happily moving to read ch16 now.

[mijan.livejournal.com]

Well, Reserves is different than Active Duty, but regardless, when you sign up, you're stuck for a certain period of time, no matter what. If you get out BEFORE your time period is up, it either has to be for a medical reason, or because you're in trouble. And if you're in trouble, you don't get an honorable discharge, and that effects your ability to get civilian employment. So, basically, I'm stuck for another 6 1/2 years.

[mijan.livejournal.com]

Ah, okay. Not a problem. :)

Oh, and brace yourself for this chapter... you might want tissues.

[spirit-rider16.livejournal.com]

That would have been a good warning to get before reading the chapter! ;D Really, I think you should post that in the author notes or something, at least then I wouldn't have had to go searching for some halfway through the chapter!

I've already commented on schnoogle and the y!group, but I'll say it again: wow. Fantastic. Amazing. And...yeah. My overly optimistic side is saying Draco *has* to come back, but who knows. Well, you do, but that's beside the point, right? :D

Good to know you might be able to go to TWH. If I weren't so poor I'd probably go...*wibbles* But nevertheless, I hope you get to go and have fun! And hopefully you'll be able to stay up here in New England a little longer, since fall is such a pretty season around here!

[mijan.livejournal.com]

Yeah, I really do want to stay in New England... I do love it here very much. That, plus, I hate New Jersey, and I'm not to keen on this particular war. Blah.

And yeah, maybe I could have given people a warning to keep some tissues handy, but that might have spoiled some of the surprise! *evil grin*

[(Anonymous)]

BLISSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!! *runs off to read*

[the-smirker.livejournal.com]

that sucks about the deployment thing. sorry. i will be sure to write losts of reviews...*grins* i jsut finished chapt 16. WHY DID YOU (appear to) KILL OF DRACO??????? (thats assuming you just appeared to kill him)i cried..it was soo sadening and touching, but i don't weant him to die! i love him! he and harry have kiss!!!! they haven't kissed yuet and draco already "died" thats muy mal, i and sad now...can't wait til the next chapter.. maybe HARRY'S love will bring D back alive *smirks*

~ admiring fan and part time smirker

oops

[the-smirker.livejournal.com]

oops! i just realized i gave away the entire ending *collapses in sad feeing puddle*

sorry guys!

[mijan.livejournal.com]

*giggle*

Re: oops

[mijan.livejournal.com]

It's okay... spoilers are allowed. And smirking is encouraged. ;)

[degrees.livejournal.com]

Err... that was me...

*sobs* SO HEARTWRENCHING!!! I must read more. I MUST!

You're brilliant, you know? I can't wait until the next chapter!!

~Lizzie~

[mijan.livejournal.com]

*blushes*
Well, I'm starting the planning for the next chapter tonight. Hopefully, I'll be able to write it before I'm gone.

[degrees.livejournal.com]

*grins* I can hardly wait!! I wish I was your brain right now, so I'd know what happens. The end of that chapter was so sad... but I have hope for Draco. Call me an eternal optimist.

Either way, This is definitely one of my favourite stories. Ever.

*hugs* And I do mean it about your brilliance. Would that I could be like you.

On a fic-unrelated note, I feel for you and your deployment. I know what it's like to have family in the armed services (my brother is a submariner, and my cousin in in military intelligence and will probably be deployed to Iraq soon-ish).

And, y'know, I was totally planning on going to TWH so that I could find you and fangirl you to death... but now? I still want to go, but chances are smaller that I'll be able to go (what with not having a whole lot of vacation time left).

[mijan.livejournal.com]

Well, I'm still trying to make it to TWH. My new unit in New Jersey hasn't contacted me, and until I have orders in my hands, I'm not going ANYWHERE. I'm determined to make it to TWH, because I desperately want to meet people, and SQUEEE! with fellow fandomers and H/D shippers, and just generally have a good time. So, I've learned in life that when you want something badly enough... somehow, you get it.

Regarding the fic... *blushes* No reason to fangirl me. I'm just a person who got an idea for a story, and who is just trying not to screw up the plot. Every chapter, when I post it, I just pray that it's good enough, and that people won't tell me it sucks.

As for what's happened to Draco... obviously, I can't tell you, but I promise the ending will be satisfying... that is, if I don't fuck it up.

[degrees.livejournal.com]

Pssh, I don't see how you could fuck it up. Unless you cut corners, pull something out of your ass that is utterly improbable, or use a deus ex machina in an inappropriate way. Other than that... as long as Draco survives and they go off and have hot monkey sex, all is well with me. I'm pretty easy to please, see.

*laughs* Of course I need to fangirl you. And you will just have to live with it. *evil smirk*

[mijan.livejournal.com]

*meep* Oh dear... no fangirling. I'm not fangirl-worthy. Just some weird person with a story. That's all.

[degrees.livejournal.com]

How about if I fangirl discreetly? I'm good at discreet...